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erinro Joined: Nov 13, '09 Status: Senior User	2009-12-26 22:47:09
	briefly because the poem stretches to come of age I turn off the light and you and your shadow go with it I turn in the wisp of cloud I mistook for an embrace you've been misplaced (I’ve been disgraced) your shadow has gone missing (I sleep in its darker shade) an insect climbs over typewriter keys tomorrow, the notices and the hands wringing what the tongue won't tomorrow tomorrow **** words catch like flies on the spider web that hangs between our skin I push it aside. It makes no difference. I am stamped under the sign of your voice. I carried you as a memory these heavy months curled and sleeping tight as a fist as the smallest word, “I” (meiosis: the skin gone and knew the sun splitting learning)
erinro Joined: Nov 13, '09 Status: Senior User	2009-12-26 22:48:05
	hmm it doesn't do indents. that changes everything
Delirius Joined: Nov 3, '09 Status: Senior User	2009-12-26 23:02:36
	Did you spell it wrong on purpose?
haart Joined: Oct 17, '09 Status: Senior User	2009-12-26 23:04:33
	Wow. I usually hate poetry but I love this. Wow... Are you published?
Delirius Joined: Nov 3, '09 Status: Senior User	2009-12-26 23:08:23
	I don't ever understand poetry unless its mine sorry :/
erinro Joined: Nov 13, '09 Status: Senior User	2009-12-27 07:52:51
	oh, *blush* thanks so much! i sort of am. won a couple of awards back in the day. this stuff is old; i wrote almost a book of stuff right b4 crashing & going on antidepressants & not writing anything for years.. then re-found this stuff, none of which is published or which anyone has seen (other than you guys).
Abbey Joined: Dec 8, '09 Status: Junior User	2009-12-29 13:59:09
	Im a writer and Poems are very deeply personal. Now when I share one, I EXPLAIN it to the person/group. Cuz I never get poems either! lol... But sumtimes, just the words are beautifully arranged/used. So at least we can appreciate that. Write on...
erinro Joined: Nov 13, '09 Status: Senior User	2009-12-29 16:36:16
	Why don't you share some, Abbey? I'm not sure that there is anything to 'get' about poetry; I think it's supposed to disrupt meaning and displace people from their normal habits of looking at things rather than mean something well-defined/objective. But let me see. The first one is about feeling abandoned by bf and trying to find a way to represent it that is not sentimental (emotion cheaply bought etc). The second one is about creativity and what a 'muse' is for a woman, since normally in literature women are muses for men, and passive. The 'you' is the typical absent lover of lyric poetry i guess, but love poetry is ultimately addressed to the self and so the you is the self as well, kind of like giving birth to the self in art. If that makes any sense. I used 'meoisis' or splitting as a symbol for that - representing oneself in art as a process of going from one (self) to two (self and self-image). But i wasn't really thinking all of that when i wrote it, was just thinking about the words. Any suggestions please send em my way! Thanks
Obsidian Joined: Jan 22, '10 Status: Junior User	2010-02-12 10:04:24
	I don't them, like it would be random words blurted out. :P
Obsidian Joined: Jan 22, '10 Status: Junior User	2010-02-12 10:04:54
	get them*
bigsis Joined: Jan 20, '10 Status: Junior User	2010-02-12 17:27:47
	Ulysses.
Obsidian Joined: Jan 22, '10 Status: Junior User	2010-02-12 17:34:51
	Is it from that novel?
bigsis Joined: Jan 20, '10 Status: Junior User	2010-02-12 17:40:10
	No, I'm saying, Ulysses. 1922. Unanamously acknowledged greatest novel of the century in English, and it's ground zero for random words blurted out.
Obsidian Joined: Jan 22, '10 Status: Junior User	2010-02-12 17:46:25
	Haha, ok. We had to read that one in school a long time ago. Didn't like it, guess I have bad taste then. :P
Delirius Joined: Nov 3, '09 Status: Senior User	2010-02-12 17:47:58
	Or you weren't at a point to like it. Some books you just won't like at some points, like Tale of two cities.
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