this is one of my old poems i found- need feedback

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Posted by spidermonkey02 on Apr 24-04 2:53pm
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I'm too analytical, mind in a daze
Rough as leather, soft as lace

Too naive, can't think for myself
Wishing for Heaven, yet living in Hell

Hopeless as fuck, a little spark to spare
Speaking words that only hit air

No love for myself, I'm my only friend
No more heart to break, no more pain to mend

Optimistic about the future, pessimistic about now
Trying to figure out why, not about how

In need of love, shine away from affection,
In a crowed room, feeling neglection

Need to be felt, cringe at a touch
Need to find love, but neer can trust

I laugh at my pain, tears won't stop flowing
Heart is so dark, anger is glowing

Stand for my rights, coward in a corner
Stand in a crowd, always a loner

Living on a wish, hope never lasts
Trying to move on, stuck on the past

Living for something that won't happen, hard to say good bye,
The truth, never revealed, everything's a lie

Love is not the answer, yet , the only thing that heals
Have to face my problems, never wanna deal

Want to know the truth, yet i shield my ears
Want to feel reality, only what I can bear

Wanting to really live, hoping to finally die
Stumble on my words while trying to speak my mind

Happiness I crave, sadness is all I feel
See no end is near, I hope I learn to deal.

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this is one of my old poems i found- need feedback - spidermonkey02 - Apr 24-04 2:53pm
Re: this is one of my old poems i found- need feedback - demonsblackrose - May 8-04 3:37pm
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